A much improved essay that clearly demonstrates that you have read key text and incorporated a critical perspective into your essay.
A few things to consider:
1. see corrections – in red
2. Referencing: Consistent use of either numbering or Harvard system of referencing
3. Data under each illustration ie artist name, title, year
4. Word count is 8000 and normally we say limit it to max 3000 words. We can edit it and take out some sections but let us just leave it for now until I investigate further if there is a maximum word count in the syllabus
Once you have made the above minor changes the essay is completed. In terms of assessment it is in level 6 equal to an A*
Hi Aimee,
A much improved essay that clearly demonstrates that you have read key text and incorporated a critical perspective into your essay.
A few things to consider:
1. see corrections – in red
2. Referencing: Consistent use of either numbering or Harvard system of referencing
3. Data under each illustration ie artist name, title, year
4. Word count is 8000 and normally we say limit it to max 3000 words. We can edit it and take out some sections but let us just leave it for now until I investigate further if there is a maximum word count in the syllabus
Once you have made the above minor changes the essay is completed. In terms of assessment it is in level 6 equal to an A*
Well done!
Mr T