Link to the whole photobook
Does the essay address its hypothesis?
“The male gaze: How are women represented in photography?”
It does as it explores what the male gaze actually is and how Cindy Sherman and Kourtney Roy present women in their work. These pieces of work are heavily edited and show women as being very innocent and obedient, in the sense that they do all the house work and care for the children.
Does it provide new knowledge and understanding?
Yes
Is the essay well structured with a sense of an introduction, paragraphs and a conclusion?
There was a structure in this essay, in the sense that she had an introduction, main points and conclusion. However, I don’t think it was well presented. The paragraphs lacked consistency as they were all different sizes and all over the place because she placed her images in the middle of her essay which made the text go a bit funny. This makes these particular pages look very messy and unappealing.
Use and flow of language, prose, punctuation, spelling.
She did this, but there are some spelling mistakes through out the essay.
Use of specialist vocabulary relating to art and photography.
Yes
Analysis of artist’s oeuvre (body of work) and key work(s)
She didn’t analyse any particular body of work, but she did look at two artists and gave us information about their work. To improve she should include at least one analysis.
Evidence of wider reading with reference to art history/ theory, political discourse and/or socio-economical context.
There ae references to wider reading in this essay. She uses quite a few quotes from other pieces of work that are listed in her bibliography.
Use of direct quotes, summary or commentary from others to make an informed and critical argument.
These were used and sourced at the end of the essay.
Use of referencing system (eg. Harvard) and a bibliography.
In this essay, Stephens attempted a bibliography and a referencing system at the end of essay. Through out her essay the quotes are identified with numbers which are then put into bibliography so that they’re easier to identify. I would’ve personally made the bibliography and quotes two separate things.
Use of illustrations with captions listing name of artist, title of work and year of production.
She used illustrations, however, they were not captioned with name of artist, title of work and year of production. Some had the name of the artist and the name of the collections the pictures are from, and other had the year of production and name of collection.