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Overall a well written essay, As Mr Cole has already given you some feedback and instructions on how to improve its better you stick with that and follow his lead.
There are few details in the syntax – sentencing structure that needs to be changed. For exampe in Intro: No need to repeat ‘Retracing Our Steps. in sentence
its better you refer to ‘the carpenter’ as you dad who was the carpenter/builder
Also Harvard Referencing system – see ppt here. After a quote inside the text you write (author’s surname year of publication: page no)
Overall a well written essay, As Mr Cole has already given you some feedback and instructions on how to improve its better you stick with that and follow his lead.
There are few details in the syntax – sentencing structure that needs to be changed. For exampe in Intro: No need to repeat ‘Retracing Our Steps. in sentence
its better you refer to ‘the carpenter’ as you dad who was the carpenter/builder
Also Harvard Referencing system – see ppt here. After a quote inside the text you write (author’s surname year of publication: page no)
https://hautlieucreative.co.uk/photo16a2/wp-content/uploads/sites/2/2016/01/harvard-system-of-referencing.pdf