The script I chose with Lawrence is a scene out the film ‘FULL METAL JACKET’ which includes the mental breakdown of Leonard aka. Sargent Pile in a bathroom. A character called ‘Joker’ finds him and tries to tell him that their drill Sargent will not be happy if he finds them in the bathroom at the given time (appears to be night). We had another option of the film ‘BRONSON’ but felt that would be impractical and difficult to do.

We chose this part of the script as it has compelling lines and it is the climax of the film as it follows with Leonard shooting his drill Sargent and himself afterwards. Our script does not contain that part of the scene as we came to the conclusion it would be too difficult to portray that in the time given for the task. Another reason why we chose this part of the script is because the lines were short so the actors different have to memorize lots of long lines. We fed the lines to the actor within takes which was quicker and more efficient.

SHOOT

We made the creative decision to not shoot the scene in a bathroom as we thought it would be very unpractical as, differently to the film set we don’t have a open bathroom in our school, we have cubicles which would have made it more difficult to capture some of the shots. Also due to the fact that there might have been people who needed the toilet interrupting us while we were shooting. Instead I came up with the solution to use the Drama changing rooms, which were empty and more practical to use.

For lighting we used 3 mobile phones placed on the floor in specific areas that suited the type of eerie tone in the scene.

To improve the scene I could of done with different angles of shots for example an over the shoulder shot. This addition of shot would give the audience a sense of place of context and time. Both aren’t ever in the same shot which gives question to whether they might not be talking to each other.

Advantages:

• The changing rooms were more practical to use
• Lighting was effectively used and easy to maneuver in and out of the room.
• The script suited the amount of actors we had available
• The script was short so shooting didn’t take a long time
• We had a lot of time on post-production and editing

Disadvantages:

• The separate shots of the two characters were shot at different times which affected the continuity and flow of the scene.
• Both characters are never seen in the same shot which affects the context and continuity for the audience.
• The use of a bathroom set wasn’t available
• Audio wasn’t good quality as we lacked the resource of a mic or boom

FINAL EDIT

In our edit we shot the two characters scenes in two different blocks and edited them together to make the scene. We did a shot reverse shot of the two characters.

I attempted to make the scene flow better through J and L cuts and to help the context and continuity for the audience but the audio wasn’t the best so it couldn’t give the affect I had attempted.

Link to the final edit – M:\Students\Year 12\Charles Dubois\Full metal jacket edit

BLANK SCREEN:
Against Black, TITLE CARD:
 "...and these children that you spit on,
 as they try to change their worlds are
 immune to your consultations.  They're
 quite aware of what they're going through...
 - David Bowie"

The Blank Screen and Title Card SHATTER to reveal...

1. EXT. SHERMER HIGH SCHOOL - DAY

During Brian's monologue, we see various views of
things
inside the school including Bender's locker.

 BRIAN (VO)
 Saturday...March 24, 1984.  Shermer
 High School, Shermer, Illinois.
 60062.  Dear Mr. Vernon...we accept
 the fact that we had to sacrifice a
 whole Saturday in detention for
 whatever it was that we did wrong,
 what we did was wrong.  But we think
 you're crazy to make us write this
 essay telling you who we think we
 are, what do you care?  You see us
 as you want to see us...in the
 simplest terms and the most
 convenient definitions.  You see us
 as a brain, an athelete, a basket
 case, a princess and a criminal.
 Correct?  That's the way we saw each
 other at seven o'clock this morning.
 We were brainwashed

I wasn’t in the group at first but as I was ill, I offered to edit a version of it. The breakfast club is a great film that’s starts with a good opening that was easy to replicate with a voice over. The memo of the film is that you should never judge a book by its cover which is what our whole group felt was a good message to portray for this small project. This was hard as I was given clips to put together, but I didn’t know which order was best and to make sure that the audio/ monologue went well with what I edited. When I edited together, I tried to show a progression of the school so that it shows the character moving through and show their adventure in a chronological order. There was a lot of miscommunication and if the communication was better, we would’ve been able to progress faster and allow me to work better so that they could catch me up on what had happened. 

There were many decisions I could’ve made but I chose to stay with the group so that I could show that I had improved my editing to show I could edit together a film with audio and show that I could use dissolves where they would mean something instead of doing it for every edit. If i were to do this again, I would be the cinematographer as i think that there could be many things that could’ve been done to intrigue the watchers like closeups and shots that go along with the audio.

For IB, Group work is normally assessed in terms of three specific criteria:

A.Demonstration of skills in one chosen film production role (8 marks ) ACTION The quality and making of the video.

B.Justification of creative work in one chosen film production role (8 marks ) INQUIRY The post on why you chose the screenplay you worked on.

C. Reflection on collaboration in the core production team (8 marks ) REFLECTION The post where you assess what you have learned and what you’ll do next time.

Note that I’ll be looking at your creative screenplay group projects and giving marks on GO4SCHOOLS for each of the criteria above. These are not coursework marks but more intended to give a sense of current progress.

You must have all your posts in order and ready for marking by Friday 24th Jan.