INT – DAY – LOUNGE

Two characters – 1 and 2 – are seen lying on a couch fast asleep, the rubbish from what seemed to be a party litter the room. Suddenly the doorbell buzzes very loudly and wakes both characters up. 1 however tries to fall back asleep and so 2 gets up and answers the door.

Unknown man

“Ah hello I’m Mr 3, 1’s Landlord, is he in?”

A hand from out of scene gives 2 a note. When opened it reads – ‘IM NOT HERE – in a rushed and messy handwriting. 2 stands close to the door so as to block view into the house, however not completely.

2

“Oh you know what, he JUST left for work”

right after saying this 1 rushes across frame

Mr 3

“was that-

2

“ahhh no that was just someone from the party last night”

Mr 3

“PARTY?! oh no there is no parties allowed and 1 knows this, i definitely need to speak to him now.”

2

“Oh no don’t worry we didn’t have the party here, we…. used the neighbours house ?”

Mr 3

“You broke into the Taylor’s house?! That’s highly Illegal-“

a loud bang and “Ow” from the side of the frame that 1 disappeared to interrupts Mr 3

Mr 3

“right let me see right now”

the camera follows Mr 3 walking into the house only to see 1 peeking out of a small cupboard, 2 quickly sits on the cupboard, shutting 1 in so he cannot be seen followed by another “OW” from 1.

2

“See? Nothing”

Mr 3 stutters a bit in confusion

2 leads Mr 3 out of the house and faces him away from the house with his arm around Mr 3’s shoulder at the same time we can see 1 running into frame form the right and then out of frame again into a different room.

2

“look, I’m REAALLY hungov- busy, i’m really busy so please come back another time, Ok? Bye”

Before Mr 3 can argue 2 has shut the door.

basic idea – landlord comes to tell tenant that the rent is overdue, tenant tries hard to avoid the landlord seeing him.

shot pacing very important in comedy, additionally its very important to have a significant visual comedic style for example i will be taking inspiration from Edgar Wright. specifically the way things enter and leave the frame in funny ways and matching scene transitions. This helps comedy from being purely sound based – dialogue and helps it to be seen in the performance of characters – physical comedy, and the way the audience sees the scene: as if we can see straight through the scheme that’s fooling a specific character but its funny to watch it confuse them.

For example: the landlord knocks on the door and the tenants friend who stayed the night since yesterdays party opens up with the tenant still asleep in the lounge. The landlord asks to see the tenant however the friend takes it upon himself to distract the landlord so the friend can escape, the camera can see the tenant run past the door from one side of the frame to the other in a comedic way – the landlord clearly sees him but before he can complain the friend distracts him again. The landlord demands to be let in so the camera pans inside to see the friend quickly hide the friend in a funny way, this carries on. It is funny because the camera – the audience’s point of view, sees right through their scheme but the landlord is getting very confused, this is much more funny than just a shot, reverse shot of dialogue.

For short thriller film – editing.

Cast: Only 2 required.

First actor: Anton Quenault. (left)

Second Actor: Krystian Skarbek (right)

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Location Recce:

Details: I will use My dining room and garden as setting for the film. By using a house i hope to cause the audience to feel as if they are at home – this gives a false sense of security and sets them up for a bigger shock later on.

Permissions: None needed

Points of Interest: I am interested in filming in my house because it is perfect mise-en-scene. I have to set very little up.

Safety Issues: None.

Electric supply: When inside i have constant access to electricity however when outside i do not, thankfully my setup does not require electricity. Batteries can be used in necessary tools.

Sunlight: Plenty of Light falls into the room i will be filming in, however i am filming at dusk so i am using artificial lights inside.

Windows: there is one large window in the room, plenty of light can be seen through it .

Noise: Unfortunately my house is located right next to a busy main road, however i will be recording my audio separately and adding it in post. I will record the audio in a sound studio setup at school where there is much less noise.

Screenplay:

Fade In:

INT. DINING ROOM – Night

On a cold winters night ANTON,  sits at the table smiling at something on his phone. Its a series of pictures of him and his friends, they seem to be having a great time.

EXT. NEXT TO THE ROAD – NIGHT

KRYSTIAN crouches against a stone wall, right next to the gate of the garden he must infiltrate. He looks at his watch then crouches in front of the gate and peers over. After a short while he quickly hops over the gate and into the garden.Then he gets up confidently and starts walking towards the window, round the tree, cracking knuckles and doing a few stretches as he goes.

INT. DINING ROOM – Night

KRYSTIAN’S jump could be heard faintly which perks ANTON’S attention slightly. He looks up from his phone with a slightly confused look on his face. He gets up and looks out the window from behind him, it’s difficult to see outside. All he can see is a few metres in front of him. All the while the steps are dramatically getting louder. Finally ANTON recoils from window as he sees KRYSTIAN approaching. The scene ends in blank slate.

Shooting script

Shot number	Camera/ action	Location	Shot length	audio
1	MLS Anton swiping through his phone	Dining room	3 seconds	Tapping on phone, fan hum Atmos music
2	CU Krystian crouching	Next to road	3 seconds	Car driving past Atmos music
3	MS Anton turns phone off and puts it down	Dining room	2 seconds	Phone noises, fan hum Atmos music
4	Krystian checks his watch	Next to road	2 seconds	Car driving past, watch ticking Atmos music
5	3 seconds Anton checks message	Dining room	3 seconds	Phone noises, ticking Atmos music
6	Establishing shot just of the area where Krystian was	Next to road	2 seconds	Atmos music ticking
7	MS Anton puts head in hands	Dining Room	2 seconds	Atmos music Anton sighing
8	MLS Krystian jumping the gate from behind	Next to the road	<1 second	Atmos music, Krystian’s footsteps ticking
9	MLS Krystian lands int the garden	Garden	<1 second	Atmos music Krystian landing on gravel ticking
10	MS Anton lifts his head up and starts to get up	Dining room	2 seconds	Atmos music Ticking, heartbeat.
11	Krystian walks towards the house	Garden	2 seconds	Atmos music ticking, heartbeat, footsteps, torch clicking on
12-21	Quick alternating MS between Anton walking and looking through the window from inside and Following Krystian approaching from outside	Dining room and garden	Every shot <1 second	Atmos music, ticking, heartbeat, footsteps.
22	MLS Anton recoils from the window in terror	Dining room	<1 second	Gasp from Anton, Atmos music cuts out, ticking stops, no footsteps.
23	Blank slate	N/A	1 second	Fast heartbeat