General points:

• Don’t ‘bolt’ all your historical and social knowledge on to the Introduction. It delays getting you into the main part of the essay which is HOW you’d act.
• Get to the acting quicker BUT do set up the context (2 sentences max.) Why is Smeraldina there in the scene?
• Make the acting ideas creative and specific – steal if you have to but be assertive and bold. “I will…”
• Try and get some historic/social facts into the paragraph ONLY IF THEY ANSWER THE QUESTION

SAMPLE INTRO – generic and then specific:

In Carlo Goldoni’s Commedia inspired 1745 play, ‘A Servant to 2 Masters (So2M), Smeraldina has a more prominent role than in earlier traditional Commedia scenarios. She is still based on the stock-type ‘servetta’ and she still has a commentator’s role bridging the gap between characters and audience, but she has been given her own romantic plot line with the other main servant Truffaldino.  She is outspoken and bold in the face of male authority but equally shy and endearing to the audience when seeking a suitable marriage partner. It is these character traits that I would exploit in my performance to create comedy for the audience.

1st Paragraph (showing HOW I would do this)

WHAT: A moment with comic potential is in Act 2 Scene 5 just after Smeraldina has saved her mistress Clarice from trying to commit suicide. She turns on Silvio; the hot-headed son of Dr Lombardi and Clarice’s fiancé, and delivers an amazingly energetic rant about the status of women in society and the inequality of the sexes, “The only reason we get the stick is because we don’t have a dick.” Her parting shot to Silvio is, “They (women) wouldn’t give you a second glance, ‘big boy’.” HOW: As Smeraldina, I’d use a sarcastic tone of voice and emphasise the words ‘big boy’ whilst dropping my pitch to imitate a male voice. I’d change my body language to that of a hulking, stiff alpha-male flexing his muscles in order to poke fun at Silvio and get a laugh from the audience. WHY: This would also be bold and spirited thing to do as Silvio is socially more superior, but as I’m playing Smeraldina as a 30 something woman with worldly experience and Silvio is just out of his teens, the audience will enjoy and hopefully find it funny that I am putting him back in his place through verbal and physical parody.

NEXT PARA:

Discuss something funny from the same moment – perhaps some of the sword business.

Next 2 PARAS:

Go to a new section: The Courtship of Truffaldino and Smeraldina Act 2 Scene 14: It’s a long scene so ask yourself the Question ‘WHAT’S THE FUNNIEST MOMENT’ AND JUMP TO THAT.

WHAT: Later in the play (Act 2 Scene 14) when Smeraldina and Truffaldino are having their awkward courtship, there is physical comedy that can be brought out from the moment that both admit they they can’t read.

As a performer playing Smeraldina, discuss the performance methods you would employ in order to create comedy for your audience in at least 2 sections of the play. Make specific reference to social and/or historic contexts in the play (Servant of 2 Masters) in your answer.

Introduction

What generic (general) information do you need?

What specific information? (a good place to get in some of your social / historic information, BUT don’t let it turn into a History of Commedia essay!)

Use the notes I gave you and the Commentary about Smeraldina.

2 moments that are comic – what would you choose?

Plan it! (10 mins) Be prepared to SHARE

WHAT: Know the point to your paragraphs

HOW: Know what examples / moments / quotes

WHY is it FUNNY

TASK 1

• Look at the structure of the mark scheme for this part of the exam.
• Identify what the General progression is up the Bands
• Identify what the SPECIFIC bullet points that you (the candidate have to make)
• PAIR TALK what your understanding of this is (the language can be quite hard to decipher at first)
• Look at your essay again (1 week later)
• What Band would you give it (where does MOST of the essay fit)
• Now, give it a NUMERICAL MARK out of 25 based on your analysis and the Notes I have provided.
• Look at the Mark Scheme I have given you to see if your analysis of your essay corresponds to mine.
• Stick in the BLANK Mark sheet into your So2M Journal.

How to improve (some general points)

POSITIVES: Most of you understood and got in some historic facts about|:

• Harlequin being the original / traditional name.
• The characters being a servant and lover (with the better answers indicating that the lover role was 1) made larger and 2) was more romantic than just ‘lust’ because Sacchi was the ‘star’ and had paid for the ‘commission’
• Most of you mentioned Sacchi but BE CAREFUL that you don’t rob yourself of time for the detailed focus on ‘performance’ that the essay is all about.
• YOU ARE NOT WRITING A HISTORY OF THE PLAY type essay – it must be an essay about HOW WOULD YOU PERFORM TRUFFALDINO.
• All of you wrote about being the PERFORMER (no one missed the target)

NEGATIVES:

• Write more! I gave you a detailed plan – you should have written for 45 mins {but actually you had 30-35 mins}. At 7-10 mins a paragraph that’s 4.5 paragraphs = 2 to 2.5 side of A4
• You must talk in specifics: Establish the moment clearly. Who, where, when and why: {Zoom in from a Long shot to a Close Up) “ When I enter Pantaloon’s room to announce my Master is down stairs, I will…”
• You MUST imagine you are playing the role. “If I was playing the part…(?) You are playing the part!!! E.g. “As Truff. I will… {Use the PRESENT tense as if you are acting as you write}
• You need to state ‘the effects’ you wish to create. I gave you a list of 6
• Some of you MUST re-read your words/sentences because what you’re writing is NOT GOOD ENGLISH.
• Try and develop a writing style that is simple but specific. Every line you write should specifically refer back to the question or illustrate your answer in some clear way.
• Don’t say ‘over the top’  – say exaggerated or heightened …
• Get in more than 1 acting skill per example: If you are saying something about vocal delivery then go on to add what your face is doing, add a gesture or move you make, say what your body language is doing, how close or far away you are from other characters or the audience. (Try for 4 acting terms – the Mark scheme say you must use subject specific terminology)
• Be more creative – don’t just say what the script says (add value!) E.g. The letter re-sealing lazzo. To say you’ll do it 3 times is just repeating what’s in the script. To say you strangle yourself in your attempt not to swallow or you tie string to the bread as a ‘clever’ precaution is CREATIVE – even if the idea came from someone else. Pass it off confidently as yours!